I do like the format you are writing in ^___^ And, yay, lots of abbreviations to make things look cool!

Due to lack of space on the main post, i will continue the story here.



Chapter 3

48 hours later





Due to the lack of wings, the End capabilities to escort its ships where very limited, so the did escorted entire convoys of more than 10 civ ships scattered to not give the enemy the chance to bomb all of them at once with a few bombs. But, despite all efforts many civ dies or was enslaved by the UE, and many civ ships, even with the proper escort, where destroyed by the overwhelming firepower of the UE Battleships. in the end of 48 hours of intense work with the pilots on basis of high-concentrated caffeine pills, all was finished.





The UE dominated all Systems within 50 hours, this was a invasion on massive scale, all at once and with superior techs like the Intra-System jumps and much more, the Pilgrim fleet s never had a chance, so in the end, there was only 28 civ ships saved by the hard work of the pilots, incredibly the only toll at of the Battleship End pilots was of Benjamin Lacan, a young pilot who saved 8 civ ships ramming itself into the UED Gilgamesh reactors, causing a massive explosion that destroyed both his fighter and the entire destroyer. He was the hero of the day and gained a posthumous medal of Exceptional Military Achievement.





Abe lost most of the ships he escorted alongside his wing, he was not courageous enough to ram himself into some battleship, but it would be of no use, he had 2 Destroyes attacking his escorts and he was lucky just to have survived, even to achieve the protection of the 3 ships like he did. The problem is: he tried to protect 20 ships...not too good for his military service...





Abe was not a talented pilot, his talents were most on strategy and tactics, he even received a offer to do the Officer Training and be a officer within the End, but he refused, he liked more piloting and doing dome action than planning behind the scenes. But, after today, he was felling so unhappy and frustrated, that he wished to accept that offer, he considered to talk with Abraxas to change his role within the fleet. His appearance was of a average 25 years old man, he was not especially strong, but he was extremely intelligent, not as much as Abraxas was, but enough to be one of the best mind of the End. He had bald head, once asked why he simply said "Hair is too much work to maintain", 1.78 meters tall, 76 kg and something of a intellectual on his face. He was born at Hope on Hope City, the great and monumental capital of the planet. With his now dead-or-enslaved family. On hope was the plane which he found his one and only love Anna, already dead or enlaved at this time "no matter, then" he thinks, the reason was because he broke with her, after discovery her infidelities, one of the reasons why he enlisted at the Fleet. "Funny to think im alive and free because of this...should i thank Anna and this idot Yuri? haha" he thinks again.





He decided to talk with now-admiral Abraxas.





-Hello? anyone there?





Abraxas said:





-Wait a minute...what you want?





She appeared out of some room with casual clothes (the rules at Pilgrim´s uniform was very flexible):





- Where you go? damn... no matter...im here to say i wish to resign my role as pilot and want to be reassigned at some of strategic and tactical role...





-Why do you wish to do it now?





-After my failure on with the escort mission, i finally realized that is should have accepted that offer of training...





-Yea, you should, but, bow its too late, this ships need more pilots, not more officers, deal with it. come with me.





-Wh...where to sir?





Abraxas laughed.





-No Abe, not "sir", just Juliet now...we are going to the main bar to drink a little with the rest of the crew, we need it...





-Alright...Juliet...





Glossary:

UE - United Empire

UED - United Empire Destroyer

VLFT - Very Low Frequency Transmission

FTL - Faster Than Light

HFC - High Frequency Communicator

PFB - Pilgrim Fleet Battleship

PFSSF - Pilgrim Fleet Space Superiority Fighter

PFB - Pilgrim Fleet Bomber



So say what you think guys!

=D

Chapter 2 is out.

wait for more! \o/

Troodon wrote:
I think I like where this is going. Good job!



Personally, I'm rooting for the UE. Having recently left warhammer 40k, I still sort of have the 40k authoritarian warlike mindset.



FOR THE EMPEROR!



Improvements: ..... Can you give a vivid description of the UE fleet raking and destroying the Pilgrims? Those traitors have it coming.

Well, the intention its to give a most neutral possible narrative of the events, since the extincxtion of n entire people isn´t something i would take that lightly, im most interested in giving a good background for the events after the Fall which are, in fact, the true story i am witting.



But i will think about writing everything to be exciting and fun to read.



I will update if not today, tomorrow.

Good start



Improvements: Hmm... haven't found any important improvements yet.

Well, Continue to read the story, you will surely find something you want to see improved. xD

thanks!

I think I like where this is going. Good job!



Personally, I'm rooting for the UE. Having recently left warhammer 40k, I still sort of have the 40k authoritarian warlike mindset.



FOR THE EMPEROR!



Improvements: ..... Can you give a vivid description of the UE fleet raking and destroying the Pilgrims? Those traitors have it coming.

Good start



Improvements: Hmm... haven't found any important improvements yet.