HAHAHA lol - the "human" references in ES - genius!



More, pleeeeeeeeeease?

Madrox wrote:
Yes, sorry, but this chapter needed to be short. xD

No problemo



Looking forward to the next one

Yes, sorry, but this chapter needed to be short. xD

Short, but surprising



Well done

Chapter 8

5 seconds after chapter 7



Abe was shocked, how could this happen? "What is this? wahsn´t you disappeared, sir?", Abraxas laughed a little and begins to explain "Well, this was simply a test" Abe says "Test? this is absurd! i broadcaster a message to all the fleet right now! what will you say tot he people?" Abraxax explains "You didn´t broadcasted nothing, it was only a simulation, everyone here knew about this, everyone but you. I wanted to see how would you react to a situation of stress and command.But rejoice! You did admirably." Abe says " Thank you sir, but, what was that for?", Abraxas says " I tought much about you wish to take a position of command and tactics and i decided to grant you this wish, right now im creating a hybirid officer-pilot patent, you will be a pilot when needed but right now, you will be mainly a tactical officer." Abe says " I don´t know what to say sir...thanks...but, was all this play really necessary?" Abraxas "Yes, it was, because i wasn´t sure about your performance in situations like that, well, later we can talk if you have any questions left, right now i need retake my command, we heard reports about..." An alarm sounds on,everyone knew what this means, hostiles "Sir! hostiles! 2 Gargula Class Battleships and 4 frigates! they are heading our direction!" Abraxas says"Everyone to your posts! Abe, right now, take a fighter in the hangar, we need you to command Alpha Wing!" Abe responds "Yes sir".





He runs off to a corridor, he was still with he admiral uniform and still a little stressed, but killing UE fighters aways calmed him. He reaches the hangar bay number 4, he took the fighter and flew off to battle.



"Damn it!"



End of Chapter 8



well, that´s it guys.

enjoy.

Madrox wrote:
Its kinda sad when only you comment my new chapters. ç_ç



Well, next chapter will be out tomorrow.

It's mid-week.. people are working (or not, such people as me, students)

Its kinda sad when only you comment my new chapters. ç_ç



Well, next chapter will be out tomorrow.

Nice Speech, indeed lol

Chapter 7

10 minutes after chapter 6



-So you´re saying that the Admiral has disappeared 20 hours ago?

-Something like this, yea, she was pretty stressed by something, but she wouldn´t tell us anything and 4 days ago she ordered the Fleet to stop at this moon out there, since then we have been waiting for something...no orders, just waiting...

-Where are we right now?

-Since the last jump? i think this is Hissho territory, by official star-maps its designated as "Karash´Vor", and this is the 12° moon of planet Yolkar, called, Barash T´Nic.

-So many names...well, who is in command now?

-Well, since there wasn´t any person superior to you in rank...but, you where still on coma, so the Second Lieutenant James Farrah.

-So, now that i am awake...im in charge?

-That´s correct.



Abe was shocked, he always had a nack for commanding and tactical roles, but now he was facing command with zero expertise. And worse, he recently recovered from alcoholic coma, its not a good thing to have in curriculum when comes to morals...



-I suppose i should go to the bridge take command, damn...im not prepared for this.

-Right now...no one is.



3 hours later



Abe was in some new uniform, he was highly uncomfortable with all this, but it was his duty. He was inf ront of a microphone and a camera, ready to speak to all the fleet in live.



-People of the Pilgrims...My name is Abe Gohosh Al´Faran, Liutenant-Commander directly under Admiral Abraxas herself, since her disappearance, yesterday, i am the Commander-in-Action of the fleet. Im no officer, i have none experience with command and i recently come from a alcoholic coma, you see, im not perfect, im not the best man that could take this position, but im the best we got and if we want to survive, i ask everyone of you to trust me, i will do the best in my abilities to protect this fleet and every life within it. I will carry on the final orders of Admiral Abraxas until we know her fate, we are currently in a moon of Hissho territory, i know this is dangerous, bur im certain that we can hide here for at least 5 days due to the EM Radiation that block any signs of our presence here for a limited time, when this time pass, i will be forced to override Abraxas orders and go on the planned route, i can assure you, we will find Abraxas, we will survive this. Have faith brothers! the Endless didn´t abandoned us yet. Commander Gohosh, out.



He felt like all the weight of the world was on his shoulder, Abraxas feels this way everyday? Abe was not able to comprehend how she could bear this...or maybe she didn´t, maybe she killed herself...no! no...she couldn't , she was too honored to abandon everyone like this without good reason...right?



-That was a impressive speech, Abe!



That voice...



-J...Juliet?



-Please, officially, is Admiral Abraxas...



End of Chapter 7.

Madrox wrote:
He´s kind of an alcoholic depressive kind fo character. i have big plans for him

Good, good!

Tredecim wrote:
Tz tz tz drinking too much is baaaad D:

He´s kind of an alcoholic depressive kind fo character. i have big plans for him



edit: much inspired in Saul Tight from BSG really...xD

Tz tz tz drinking too much is baaaad D:

Chapter 6



Some hours later chapter 3



Abe was drunk, he always been weak tot his kind of strong ale that the bar of the End offers, strange indeed, since he could drink much more than this of much stronger drinks and would not be drank, maybe they put some special ingredient on this one, who knows, he was remembering the "peaceful" times since the last exodus of the fleet, he was just a little boy when his father died to protect his ship from destruction by the UE, but for sure, this was not what he was confronting, massive fleets attacking at the same time, overwhelming each convoy, damn it....he was remembering his infancy, he needed to drink more.



After some hours of drinking and self-pity, he black-out and wakes on a strange room, he looked at his clock, t was day, Abraxas said to him that he needed to report early in the morning, he jump´s out the bed just to discover he was almost naked, just in underwear and he was not seeing his clothes anywhere near "shit! where am i?" thinks Abe "and this headache...argh!"



-Try to remain calm Abe, you are in the MedBay, you gave quite a show uh? you looked like a adolescent drinking for the first time.



It was Dr.Caroline Virgon, the main doctor responsible for the End. she was always serious, rumors says she lost all her family before the last Great Exile.



-For Endless sake...arrghhh...this headache is killing me...



-Yes, you had a black-out after vomiting 6 times. tsk, you are too weak...



-Damn...how long i´ve been sleeping?



-2 weeks, you almost died from this alcoholic coma.



Abe was shocked, this never happened to him.



-Damn...so, something interesting happened since i was awake for the last time? shit...doc....give me some pills...



-No, this is your punishment. look for yourself, you are fully recovered, so leave this bed and go take some shower and discover what happened.



-You are cruel doc...



-No, but you are occupying a bed that could be used by other person if we are attacked again, so, come back just in a emergency.



So Abe dressed himself and leaved the MedBay. "Carol was quite serious...what happened since then?" Abe thought. No one talked to him, everyone seemed in a hurry to do something, he did just go to his quarters and took some shower.



3 hours later he was reading the last news, he saw Abraxas giving her speech, and readied many exemplars of the Official Jounal, he was shocked this was more serious than he previously thought. So, someone knocked his door.



-Who is it?



-Its me Abe!



-Jules??



He opened his door.



-Damn man! how long have been?



-Shit, 3 years? yeah, come in! how are you?



Jules was a old friend of him, one he thought he lost in the invasion.



-Yeah, im fine, i was in the agricultural ship Gaia Solemnity, i escaped in your convoy man! can you believe it?



-Seriously? the only ship that escaped was your ship? lucky huh?



-Thank bro. so, did you sawthe last news?



-I´ve been out for 2 weeks now, i was researching about it when you entered in. what happened?



-Damn man! you didn´t knew? Abraxas disappeared!



end of the Chapter 6





So, this is it guys,sorry about not having any updates recently, i was in a creative blockade. D:

but it seems i could do something.



wait for more!

Prologue



4 months after the Fall of the Pilgrims

On an Uncharted Star System



Liutenant Abe runs through the main deck "Sir! Sir!", the "sir" he was referring to was a woman,the Commander of the Battleship End, the last ship of the Pilgrims, Juliet Abraxas, she´s annoyed to be interrupted on her diary sections of meditations "what?", the poor lieutenant was startled by her blunt response but he know this is too important to wait her end what she was doing "We´ve been found!". Shocked, Abraxas says " This is not possible! the radiation of that damned neutron star should have hide our location from the UE!", Abe explains "They´ve been doing random sweeps on that sector and one of their scout wings found us, we destroyed them, but one did sent a VLS to the main fleet, we expect to be attacked in a day being very optimistic, we did activated the main reactor to power up the FTL Drives but with our low supplies it will take at least 2 or 3 days until we can jump out".



The Commander don´t react, maybe because of the realization of extinction and death, maybe lost in her own thoughts, finally she says " continue powering up the reactors at the faster rate you can do without compromise our defensive capabilities, send 3 wings of scouts around the area to search for any suspicious activity, or hopefully anything that can help us like fuel and resources, order all the decks to stay on maximum alert to the next 24 hours and finish whatever they have to finish now, i don´t want to let anyone die with remorse of not doing what they wanted, if its not a crime let them do it".The lieutenant is shocked says "Die...Sir? but with faith the Endless will help us with their infinite grace!" then she says "The endless could have helped us in the Fall! they don´t exist! not anymore. come on Abe, face death with some dignity! its a order.". Abe begins to cry, terrified both by the prospects of dying and by the atheism of Abraxas, he really believed that the Endless had a plan for them and would not permit the lasts of the Pilgrims to die so easily, when he finishes crying, the Commander isn´t in her quarters anymore. He begins to remember how this all happen so fast. he remembers of the Fall.



Chapter 1



The Sky is Falling

4 months ago

Planet Humbolt

Yellow-to-Red Star System





Abe was in a holiday, but he wasn´t with his family, they all died in the great proton bombardment on the planet Faith, perpetrated by the UE, a true, terrible and cruel war crime, but i seems to worked, they took control of the planet easily, killing almost the entire animal planet of the planet, leaving only vegetables and infrastructure, the best resolution possible for them. It was because of this event, which he luckily survived because he was in a Starliner to another planet on that day, he was forever exiled of his home-world, and was because of that too, he enlisted in the military as a pilot, a talent he discovered when i had successively destroyed 2 wings of UE fighers using only a lightly-armed civ ship, an accomplishment his superior didn´t overseen. We rapidly ranked up and in only 3 years of service, he was a Lieutenant on service of the galactic-famous Battleship End. but not that day, today he was just in a planet F**** prostitutes, drinking for his dead family and shunning the UE in the bar, today was the Dead Day, a holiday to celebrate and honor the dead in the wars.



It was 20:11 in Humbolt time shift he was in, after all day of "celebrating", drinking, shunning... he just wanted to have good night of sleep to be back on duty tomorrow for more UE hunting. but his HFC biped him "damn it!", he take the little comnicator and responded bluntly "What? what for ♥♥♥♥ Endless sake? what?", the radio stays blank until he realizes who was on the other side of the line "Oh, im sorry sir, i had a tough day" the Commander responds "Does not matter, embark now on the End, we have a situation here. I hope you can walk, if not, its very possible you die in here", Abe was shocked "Die? why?". She didn´t respnded and only said before leaving the comm link " Look the sky..." he looked "...its falling".



In fact, "falling" isn´t the best way to describe the scene, i was like all the stars in the sky, the entire universe, was falling. millions and millions of little to gigantic flaming points, which he realized was the orbital stations, warships and in fact comets was falling rapidly in the atmosphere, the inflammable oxygen-rich atmosphere of hat planet was perfect for that kind of invasion approach, each impact explosion had extra power, he rapidly run to the CCT (Crew Combat Transport), witch was 2 km from there,waiting all the pilots and crew for transport them to the Battleship.



Chapter 2



Fate

Battleship End

High Orbit of Planet Humbolt

3 hours later



Commander Abraxas was a seemingly young woman, probably around its 40 to 50 years old, with the looks of a 35 to 38 years old woman, she has long reddish brown hair, white (and tanned) skin and average body measures, he was nevertheless, a imposing presence in any circumstances, clothes or mood. She has a impressive military history, with 52 successful sorties against UE in the past 20 years of her career, cunning and she famous to have cognitive and analytically capacities that can rival with the average Sophon. She was just sitting in the briefing room, behind her was many little-monitors showing battles, explosions, destruction and death. But the main monitor was showing only the logo of the Pilgrims. She begins:



-What you see behind me its the situation we are dealing with by the last 12 hours, the UE has launched a massive attack in almost every pilgrim system. Here´s the list of already conquered systems: Argos, Ethos, Blind, Polaris, N88-A, N88-B, Zumbanza A, Bash, Endor, Lyrae, Theta Centauri...and im sad to inform that or home world Gallatea nor the command haven´t sent a word for the last 2 hours. I head about 3 massive fleet attacking Nova Prime, Hope and our system, Humbolt. Since i had not word for any Admiral or any rank above me, by the Pilgrim Military Code Section 81 Article 22 Paragraphs 12 and 13, i am hereby the temporary Admiral of the surviving fleet, until we contact a superior officer any remaining fleet will answer directly by me, understood?



Everyone:

-Yes sir!



Abraxas

- These next 24 hours will be imperative for our survival, your first mission is to escort the evac ships leaving Humbolt and gathering as much fleet warships and survivors as possible, each one of you will be grouped in 2 wings of 6 SS fighters and a wing of 4 bombers. If you come across any enemy ships, you know the drill, let the SS deal with the fighters and escort the civs and bombers and if any warship appears, let the bombers do the heavy lifting after you take care of any interceptor, rmeeber, the priority here is to protect the civs, not destroying enemies, treat them as Targets Of Opportunity, if you got the chance to deal some damage without leaving the civs or the bombers unprotected, take it, if the warships or fighters represents a threat to them, engage them, if they ignore you, ignore the back. Don´t be fooled, we lost this war, we are only fleeing them.



Abe:

-Where do they go to?



Abraxas:

-They will go with us.



Abe:

-Where?



Abraxas

-At this point? Anywhere.





Off:

Well , this is my fan fiction, i hope you like it, i know its a short one, but i am not really familiar with the english language, i´m brazillian and i learned almost entirely on self-taught, so i hope you comprehend that may be errors in grammar. please, give me some feedback so i can improve the quality of my writing. thank you!

Madness



2 hours after the chapter 3



There was a total of 29 ships in the new Exiled Fleet and the PFS Focault was one of them, this ship was a special sanatorium, where most of the mad people born in the Pilgrim colonies where placed, schizophrenics, sociopaths, psychopaths, doom´s day prophets and evangelic pastors. The most ironic was that in his convoy, she was the only survivor and one other chips was exactly a science vessel. Irony apart, the Focault was commanded and directed by Dr.Francis Heller, a experienced, arrogant, egocentric and almost narcissistic psychiatrist known by the sarcastic AKA of "Dr.Awesome".



Francis was in a dilemma, he was afraid that the patients where going to go psychotic if he tells all of them at once the truth that they were running from the UE. so he decided to have a personal conversation with each of the patients (At this time there where 86 patients being treated in the ship).



-Rise and shine, mr freeman....rise and...shiine...not that i wish imply that you´re not...



-Hello G-Man...



-...deserving of a rest and all the effort in the world where going to waste until...



-So, there is the news, we where attacked by the UE and we are fleeing from them, you understand?



G-Man was a one brilliant scientist who gone mad after a discovered he said was going to "change everything", but when they got there, he was talking gibberish and non-sense about some Mr.Freeman.



-...come again....the right man in the wrong place can make aaall the difference...so, wake up, mr.freeman...wake and...



-smell the ashes...i know gman, don´t you have any different thing to say today?



-Time? Mr.Freeman?



20 minutes later.



-Im batman...



48 minutes later



-So there was nothing, then there was everything, then nothing again...im here and im not ehre at the same time...



3 hours later



-Madness? THIS IS SPARTA!



6 hours later



-And i enjoyed the sight of his running for his own life when i place a bullet on his head wihin 3 kilometers distance! can you believe it? ♥♥♥♥ the ue! let put some bullets in their heads too! HAHAHAHAHA



Then finally the last patient of this excruciating crusade.



-So, what is is Francis? did you bring me some news about the UE?



-How do you know?



-By inference, my dear...i noticed an unusual movimentation on the ship´s crew and no one was authorized to talk about it for hours...and by, of course, seeing the firefight by the window´s glass...awesome fireworks i must say.



This was an extremely unusual patient, he was a really inteligent man, he was not really crazy, but he was forced into this Sanatorium for tryig to kill Merijane Koth, the leader of Pilgrims, but he was so inteligent that he escaped jail by successfully emulating madness, of course, Dr.Francis saw through him, but found that one so intelligent that he actually lied about his diagnostic, sayi9ng he was Schizophrenic with psychotic accesses.



-Heh, so, by this day on, you are not more obligated bylaw to remain imprisoned, since the old laws don´t exists anymore. i will leave you with a diagnostic of "capable" to live in society again and will release you.



-THank you doctor, can i go anywhere i want now?



-I would reccomend not to try assassinate anyone, but apart from this, you may do as you please.



He was going to regret this decision much later.

Madrox wrote:
You be sure i will, it may take some time, im doing planning 2 different mods and writting 3 different stories, and i have to do this alongside study, daily bike rides and metabolic necessities. xD



But im happy you liked it. =)

Now that's a busy way of living

Tredecim wrote:
It's really good stuff you are writing here, well done! (Please make more lol )

You be sure i will, it may take some time, im doing planning 2 different mods and writting 3 different stories, and i have to do this alongside study, daily bike rides and metabolic necessities. xD



But im happy you liked it. =)

It's really good stuff you are writing here, well done! (Please make more lol )

Chapter 4

1 week later - Civillian mining operations ship Atreus

Yunna Systems, near the 3° moon of Planet Maktosh.



Captain James Jarvis was anxious, frustrated and mainly...conformed. He abandoned his entire family on Galerius IV for his own survival and he almost did not survived, if wans´t for this Hero Pilot who saved him by killing himself. He admired the courage and spirit of this pilot, but was afraid he could not do the same thing, even for his family.He was not a coward, but a atheist, he didnt believed in the "power" of the Endless or any other myth like this, so, he valued his life more than anything, he had only one chance´.



Now he was at his ship´s Atrium to listen to the live-videocast broadcast to all Pimgrim Fleet and survivors remained, made by Admiral Abraxas herself. She begins:



"My dear mens and womans of this Exiled Fleet, you might have survived this first battle against the UE, we are now directing ourselves to the uncharted territories of the Sophons, i already made contact with them, and they agreed to help us into this exile, to help us found a new safe home, but it will be a long journey, we must first pass at Hissho pirate territory in the Badland Systems, deal with the unfriendly Shereydn, have some relief at Amoeba territory and enter on 4 uncharted and non-colonized systems before we can even reach them. The ETA is unknown, but something between 3 months and 1 year. this will be a long journey."



Everyone seemed shocked to known they would face such dangers, but Jarvis was strangely calm, we knew whatever would happen now, unlike his escape from the UE invasion, would be beyond his reach, he could only count on the protection of the onyl surviving Battleship.



"I regret to inform, that our spiritual and political Leader, for those who believe, High Priestess Merijane Koth, is missing since the beginning of the attack and we cannot do a search mission without risking the entire fleet. without risking your own lives and freedoms beyond the necessary, so, we can only hope that she is alive and well in somewhere safe, i received signals from other 3 Battleships, the Hiranna, The Yukata and the Faith, they tried, but failed to rendezvous with us here, so this is the cause of we standing here at this higly radioactive moon for 1 entire week, but this protection is temporary and in the long-term, to be more specific more 1 day, and we would risking being exposed at dangerous levels of radiation and because we received no answer or report from them, we will assume them as MIA. But fears not, if they reach here one day, we left a highly encrypted message within a pod hidden near the moon with a faint signal, so only the alert Commanders of these ships, if they are still alive, will found, decrypt and found our coordinates to new rendezvous points and destinations,so they can hopefully find us"



"Damn, another defeat by the hand of these bastards? will they leave us alone one day? what if the UE find this pod?" said a terrified person next Jarvis.



"I know what are you thinking, what if our enemies find our pod and decrypt this, well , this is a risk, but its very improbable that they find this pod, and even if they find, this encryption is a top-notch technogolgy exclusively made by our friends, the Sophons, utilizing a new 8192bit blocks AES , if by brute force with advance supercomputers working at parallel in the code, they would take at least years to do the thing, by this time we will hopefully at our new safe home, far from the UE. So, only our high ranking loyal commanders and officers have this code, only them can decrypt it fast enough to find us"



Jarvis had some lessons on cryptography on his time at the Academy, he knew there was some extremely advanced math involved, the Sophons are specialist at this kind of techno-things and engineering, the latest article he readied about them, its was they were developing 3 entirely new branches of math, far beyond our wildest dreams, he has some math knowledge and was a enthusiast at this, but he wasn´t even able to scratch the surface on what they were doing.



The cast continued:



"I regret to inform too, that we may have to change one of our more old traditions of the Pilgrims and enforce obligatory conscription for the military, we will recruit only the most talented people to fill the 1200 crew and pilot needs of the Battleship End, we have a serious lack of goo personnel to operate the End at full capacity, so i will ask the compliance of every civilian, men an woman alike, with age beyond 18 years old and not older than 50 years old. if you are incapable for health reasons to perform any of the roles we need, you will be dispensed, do not try to fake it, we will make a complete exams on every metabolic function you can imagine, but, because the pressure of our most religious and moralist people here on the End, we will not make any Cavity Search for preserve you "dignity". the list of all 68 required roles we need will be issued in the Official Digital Journal of The Exiled Fleet, our new journal for official announcements and news, although we will not censor any attempt of independent journalism, we had free press at our old homes, and we will have here, the only exemption is for restriction on radio and video-broadcast frequency because they are exclusive for military use, we will have a free access to the Galactic Intranet of the Sophons and Amoeba, so we can communicate to anyone using this same intranet and gain access independent uncensored blogs, vlogs, forums and more. all detailed information and regulations will be issued at the Official Journal to. please, bear in mind that any attempt to break any of the rules and regulations will be a crime, fr standard punishment of 2 to 4 weeks on jail and ban for his License for 6 months. finally, if you think you are able to perform any of the roles of the list, say so in the enlistments office and we will do the tests to see if that will be the best choice accounting your talents. Please, don´t give up, if we are destined to die here, we will do so fighting and resisting, you can surrender, but only to be enslaved or killed anyway by any of the foes we will encounter on the path. This i the Admiral Juliet Abraxas wishing you a good night and good luck."



Then the giant screen showing the Admiral fade-out and show only a black background with the Pilgrim Exiled Fleet logo. Jarvis walked by and exemplary of the Official journal and readied the list of roles with complete descriptions, capabilities and technical knowledge required to perform each one of the roles and he finally decided what to do.



End of the First Act.



Enjoy and feedback!

\o/



Updated Glossary for new terms:

UE - United Empire

UED - United Empire Destroyer

VLFT - Very Low Frequency Transmission

FTL - Faster Than Light

HFC - High Frequency Communicator

PEFB - Pilgrim Exiled Fleet Battleship

PEFSSF - Pilgrim ExiledFleet Space Superiority Fighter

PEFB - Pilgrim Exiled Fleet Bomber

AES - Advanced Encryption Standard (http://pt.wikipedia.org/wiki/Advanced_Encryption_Standard)

ETA - Estimate Time of Arrival (A RL military acronym)



obs: if there something lacking, please say so.

jpwang99 wrote:
I do like the format you are writing in ^___^ And, yay, lots of abbreviations to make things look cool!

Yea, i felt like i should invent them to give more credibility to the story. xD

thanks. =D

I do like the format you are writing in ^___^ And, yay, lots of abbreviations to make things look cool!

Due to lack of space on the main post, i will continue the story here.



Chapter 3

48 hours later





Due to the lack of wings, the End capabilities to escort its ships where very limited, so the did escorted entire convoys of more than 10 civ ships scattered to not give the enemy the chance to bomb all of them at once with a few bombs. But, despite all efforts many civ dies or was enslaved by the UE, and many civ ships, even with the proper escort, where destroyed by the overwhelming firepower of the UE Battleships. in the end of 48 hours of intense work with the pilots on basis of high-concentrated caffeine pills, all was finished.





The UE dominated all Systems within 50 hours, this was a invasion on massive scale, all at once and with superior techs like the Intra-System jumps and much more, the Pilgrim fleet s never had a chance, so in the end, there was only 28 civ ships saved by the hard work of the pilots, incredibly the only toll at of the Battleship End pilots was of Benjamin Lacan, a young pilot who saved 8 civ ships ramming itself into the UED Gilgamesh reactors, causing a massive explosion that destroyed both his fighter and the entire destroyer. He was the hero of the day and gained a posthumous medal of Exceptional Military Achievement.





Abe lost most of the ships he escorted alongside his wing, he was not courageous enough to ram himself into some battleship, but it would be of no use, he had 2 Destroyes attacking his escorts and he was lucky just to have survived, even to achieve the protection of the 3 ships like he did. The problem is: he tried to protect 20 ships...not too good for his military service...





Abe was not a talented pilot, his talents were most on strategy and tactics, he even received a offer to do the Officer Training and be a officer within the End, but he refused, he liked more piloting and doing dome action than planning behind the scenes. But, after today, he was felling so unhappy and frustrated, that he wished to accept that offer, he considered to talk with Abraxas to change his role within the fleet. His appearance was of a average 25 years old man, he was not especially strong, but he was extremely intelligent, not as much as Abraxas was, but enough to be one of the best mind of the End. He had bald head, once asked why he simply said "Hair is too much work to maintain", 1.78 meters tall, 76 kg and something of a intellectual on his face. He was born at Hope on Hope City, the great and monumental capital of the planet. With his now dead-or-enslaved family. On hope was the plane which he found his one and only love Anna, already dead or enlaved at this time "no matter, then" he thinks, the reason was because he broke with her, after discovery her infidelities, one of the reasons why he enlisted at the Fleet. "Funny to think im alive and free because of this...should i thank Anna and this idot Yuri? haha" he thinks again.





He decided to talk with now-admiral Abraxas.





-Hello? anyone there?





Abraxas said:





-Wait a minute...what you want?





She appeared out of some room with casual clothes (the rules at Pilgrim´s uniform was very flexible):





- Where you go? damn... no matter...im here to say i wish to resign my role as pilot and want to be reassigned at some of strategic and tactical role...





-Why do you wish to do it now?





-After my failure on with the escort mission, i finally realized that is should have accepted that offer of training...





-Yea, you should, but, bow its too late, this ships need more pilots, not more officers, deal with it. come with me.





-Wh...where to sir?





Abraxas laughed.





-No Abe, not "sir", just Juliet now...we are going to the main bar to drink a little with the rest of the crew, we need it...





-Alright...Juliet...





Glossary:

UE - United Empire

UED - United Empire Destroyer

VLFT - Very Low Frequency Transmission

FTL - Faster Than Light

HFC - High Frequency Communicator

PFB - Pilgrim Fleet Battleship

PFSSF - Pilgrim Fleet Space Superiority Fighter

PFB - Pilgrim Fleet Bomber



So say what you think guys!

=D

Chapter 2 is out.

wait for more! \o/

Troodon wrote:
I think I like where this is going. Good job!



Personally, I'm rooting for the UE. Having recently left warhammer 40k, I still sort of have the 40k authoritarian warlike mindset.



FOR THE EMPEROR!



Improvements: ..... Can you give a vivid description of the UE fleet raking and destroying the Pilgrims? Those traitors have it coming.

Well, the intention its to give a most neutral possible narrative of the events, since the extincxtion of n entire people isn´t something i would take that lightly, im most interested in giving a good background for the events after the Fall which are, in fact, the true story i am witting.



But i will think about writing everything to be exciting and fun to read.



I will update if not today, tomorrow.

Good start



Improvements: Hmm... haven't found any important improvements yet.

Well, Continue to read the story, you will surely find something you want to see improved. xD

thanks!

I think I like where this is going. Good job!



Personally, I'm rooting for the UE. Having recently left warhammer 40k, I still sort of have the 40k authoritarian warlike mindset.



FOR THE EMPEROR!



Improvements: ..... Can you give a vivid description of the UE fleet raking and destroying the Pilgrims? Those traitors have it coming.

Good start



Improvements: Hmm... haven't found any important improvements yet.